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She walks down the halls
alone--
silent--
She is pushed and shoved
bullied--
hurting--
She seems smaller than others
flying--
falling--
She looks at him with her best friend
smiling--
laughing--
Shes not the reason he laughs
sad--
crying--
She wishes he would remember her
lustful--
happier--
Remember the summer together
lost--
exploring--
searching--
I am the invisible girl
unseen--
unheard--
forgotten--
written from my life basically its not all the same as my life.

another love poem... hey im a romantic
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eveningstarzz Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2010
I like how each line is followed by a decription of how you feel, though at the "third line" :

"She seems smaller than others
flying--
falling--"


"flying" seems a little too positive for the line someway. It makes it look more feel good.

But other than that, the poem kind of makes me feel sad; Hope things work out better for you! :heart:
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fireheart613 Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
whoa u were right they are similar but ur poem is way better.
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truecolor101 Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
our poems are in two different styles and they are both well written. But in my opinion your poem is better
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fireheart613 Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
no,urs is better.
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truecolor101 Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
if you say so
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DrucillaNight Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2010
Annnd I feel you 100% percent, I am a romantic myself and that is how I am feeling right at this moment, after talking to this guy i have liked for a loonng while. I know and understand invisibility.

Very Awesome Poem.
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truecolor101 Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you :)
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DrucillaNight Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2010
you are welcome
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